英文写作如何在观点思路不变的情况下提高语言表达

以下题为例:

An increasing number of students choose to go to another country for their higher education. Do you think the benefits outweigh the problems associated with it?

支持观点：

1.学习异国文化，促进交流

“屌丝”版本:We can learn more foreign culture and communicate/talk with others.

“高富帅”的版本:Learning more foreign culture and communicating with others is a factor that can never be easily ignored.

诀窍：在原句中提炼关键词：learn foreign culture/ communicate，变成动名词，做新句子的主语。

2.锻炼心智，促进成长，培养独立能力

“屌丝”版本:You can grow mentally and make progress. You can take care of yourself.

“高富帅”的版本:That you can take care of yourself deserves/warrants our attention.

诀窍：原句前加that，瞬间变主语从句，一秒钟拉长句子。

3.开拓眼界

“屌丝”版本:We can open our eyes. / We can broaden our horizon.

“高富帅”的版本:Our horizon can be broadened.

诀窍：主动变被动，客观正式。

4.提升求职竞争力

“屌丝”版本:We can improve career competitiveness/in the job market.

“高富帅”的版本:Improvement of/in career competitiveness is the factor that can never be easily ignored.

诀窍：提取关键词improve，变成抽象名词。

5.文凭含金量更高

“屌丝”版本:A foreign diploma is with higher value/The diploma will be more widely recognized.

“高富帅”的版本:Wider recognition is the most frequently quoted reason when asked about why they study abroad.

诀窍：提取关键词more widely recognized，变名词词性。

6.环境优美

“屌丝”版本:The environment will be more beautiful.

“高富帅”的版本:More beautiful environment is among the many advantages of study abroad.

诀窍：提取关键词environment,beautiful。

7.完善的社会福利

“屌丝”版本:They have complete social welfare system/social safety net.

“高富帅”的版本:Complete social welfare system can be overseen under no condition.

诀窍：提取关键词complete social welfare system。

反对观点

1.孤独，寂寞

“屌丝”版本:We will feel lonelier.

“高富帅”的版本:Loneliness is what plagues the overseas students.

诀窍：提取关键词lonely，变名词，并用plague引出缺点。

2.种族歧视

“屌丝”版本:The local people will laugh at us. /racial discrimination

“高富帅”的版本:Racial discrimination makes the life of them difficult.

诀窍：提取关键词racial discrimination。

3.水土不服

“屌丝”版本:We cannot adapt ourselves easily to the new environment physically.

“高富帅”的版本:Inhabitability/Being unable to adapt to the new environment makes them suffer.

诀窍：提取关键词cannot adapt，两种方式变名词。

4.思乡

“屌丝”版本:We might miss our hometown.

“高富帅”的版本:Homesick plagues those who study abroad.

诀窍：抽象出关键性名词homesick。

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